SGA insta-rec

[marycrawford]

In decision, by flambeau. SGA, Sheppard/McKay, NC-17. This melted my brain.

No one was hurt. The city was quiet around him, at peace. John went on, not very far, and came to a halt. He stared at McKay's door until it trembled before him and slid open.

Comments

[toliver.livejournal.com]

It was a lovely fic, and thanks for the rec.:) On the other hand, am I the only one who had a problem with the "yours"? I've puzzled over it ever since reading it. I can see him saying (see how I am trying not to give anything away?) "mine" instead. Your thoughts?

[marycrawford.livejournal.com]

Heh, I don't mind if you give stuff away, but if anyone wants to remain unspoiled, go read the story now. *g*

That's a very interesting question, about the 'yours'. I was thinking about that part of the story this morning on my way to work, without having seen your question yet, and it occurred to me that yes, the obvious thing would have been for John to say 'Mine'. Because he's the one on top, isn't he? And he's definitely being 'dominant', or 'aggressive', and that's what you might expect to happen. That's the way it does happen in slash, often, I think.

Instead, he says 'Yours' and that bit, combined with the image of the gun barrel is what makes the story come together for me, what hits me in the gut with the unexpected rightness of it. Because this is John, not some alpha male prototype, and he's not, to my mind, so much claiming McKay as giving up the fight to pretend that he doesn't care, that he isn't vulnerable to losing McKay. He loves McKay, and it leaves him naked, just like not having the sunglasses on leaves him open, and he admits it by saying 'Yours, damn you', and that's...a really powerful moment for me.

[toliver.livejournal.com]

That's very eloquent. Thank you. I'm still mulling this one over. His actions and words were at odds, and that bothers me. Perhaps another reading...:)